Monday, 25 May 2009

English Weather Tanka

Rain pounds on rooftops.
Snuggle duvet closer round.
When bed is cosy
with dreams of sun-baked beaches,
why begin a day like this?

For anyone who doesn't know, this tanka follows the Japanese form of syllables: a sequence of 5-7-5-7-7 syllables on consecutive lines.
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4 comments:

  1. Lillian Robinson25 May 2009 at 14:08

    Lovely poem! Makes me want to crawl back in bed...

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  2. Unknown26 May 2009 at 03:53

    Thank you Mike.

    Lily - Ironically, I preposted this as I've been away and sunning myself on the beach in south west England. Come back with quite a glow.

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  3. Jena Isle26 May 2009 at 23:51

    It's similar to a haiku! lol...nicely written.

    Welcome back from your vacatio.

    Btw, your story is up at gewgaw.

    http://gewgawwritings.blogspot.com/2009/05/nightmare-turns-into-dream-come-true.html

    Thanks.

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  4. Joanne Olivieri27 May 2009 at 12:33

    I love these Japanese styles and you've done a great job with this one.

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