Monday, 25 May 2009

English Weather Tanka

Rain pounds on rooftops.
Snuggle duvet closer round.
When bed is cosy
with dreams of sun-baked beaches,
why begin a day like this?

For anyone who doesn't know, this tanka follows the Japanese form of syllables: a sequence of 5-7-5-7-7 syllables on consecutive lines.

5 comments:

Mike Golch said...

nice posting

MzzLily said...

Lovely poem! Makes me want to crawl back in bed...

jakill said...

Thank you Mike.

Lily - Ironically, I preposted this as I've been away and sunning myself on the beach in south west England. Come back with quite a glow.

Jena Isle said...

It's similar to a haiku! lol...nicely written.

Welcome back from your vacatio.

Btw, your story is up at gewgaw.

http://gewgawwritings.blogspot.com/2009/05/nightmare-turns-into-dream-come-true.html

Thanks.

Poetic Shutterbug said...

I love these Japanese styles and you've done a great job with this one.

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