Rain pounds on rooftops.
Snuggle duvet closer round.
When bed is cosy
with dreams of sun-baked beaches,
why begin a day like this?
For anyone who doesn't know, this tanka follows the Japanese form of syllables: a sequence of 5-7-5-7-7 syllables on consecutive lines.
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4 comments:
Lovely poem! Makes me want to crawl back in bed...
Thank you Mike.
Lily - Ironically, I preposted this as I've been away and sunning myself on the beach in south west England. Come back with quite a glow.
It's similar to a haiku! lol...nicely written.
Welcome back from your vacatio.
Btw, your story is up at gewgaw.
http://gewgawwritings.blogspot.com/2009/05/nightmare-turns-into-dream-come-true.html
Thanks.
I love these Japanese styles and you've done a great job with this one.
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